Oct/Nov 09 Porcess for Re Writing the Final Script

28th and 29th October 2009

The First and Second scenes were exciting to Re Write because my Group and I had made very good and understandable notes.

1- EXT. Grave Yard. MORNING

I included the dark sinister Grave Yard.

I wrote about: A group of Teenagers dressed in jeans, trainers and sweatshirts. I also wrote about one of the teenagers looking handsome and confident. He is wearing a leather jacket, and a huge Metal Watch on his left arm, his name is Ross. One of the other Teenagers is looking very nervous, he is sweating, his name is Tim. Another teenager wearing a baseball cap and an ear ring in his ear is holding a Clipboard with paper on it. His name is Harry.

I included: a disposable camera.

I wrote about: Harry being very organised and having a Clipboard. Tim being very nervous of Ross.

I wrote about: Tim giving Ross the Camera and Ross becoming puzzled.

Screen Fades.

2- EXT. Grave Yard. MORNING

I wrote about: Ross becoming very angry. Tim shaking with fear.

I explained that: Tim told Ross that Harry had told Tim to bring a disposable camera.

I showed that: Harry smiled nastily to himself without either Tim or Ross noticing.

I wrote about: Ross ordering Tim and Harry to get him a new camera right away.

Screen ripples to show the passing of time.


However, I found the Third scene where the boy steals the camera, a nightmare to write. I felt that my group and I had not explained this scene very well. I found myslef floundering on my own.

3- INT. Car Park. MORNING

I wrote about: A huge Car Park.

I included: Harry and Tim walking into a huge Car Park. Harry makes notes and Tim follows looking very nervous.

I wrote about: Harry and Tim steal a CCTV Camera and then leave.

Screen Ripples to show the passing of time.


I also had trouble writing about the Fourth and final scene.My Group and I had not made this section clear either. I also felt that I was floundering on my own.

4- EXT. Grave Yard. AFTERNOON

I included: Tim and Harry running fast into the Grave Yard.

I wrote about: Harry handing his Clip Board to Ross. Ross is impressed and happy with Harry.

I wrote about: Tim handing the new camera to Ross. Ross is pleased.

I wrote about: the warning from the camera saying: 'Battery Low'.

I wrote about: Ross becoming angry again at Tim and Tim becoming really nervous of Ross again.

I wrote about: Harry smiling nastily to himself without either Ross or Tim noticing.

I wrote about: Tim starting to cry and Harry smiling nastily and shaking his head.

Screen fades and the film ends.

Ideas:

Harry could be a nasty character. Trying to get Tim into serious trouble with Ross. Tim could be innocent. Ross and Harry could be seen as bullies.


1st November 2009

My Group and I met in town. I made nots on the rough outline of the Script:

Start:

2 groups of people.

In a Car Park.

Groups look like they are against each other.

Next Scene:

2 Characters holding guns.

Film in a Film.

'Action', guy taking stills with a Disposable Camera.

Wrong Camera

Confusion.

Guy with the Disposable Camera really wants to be a proper cameraman. He is eager to please. He runs off.

Next Scene:

Montage of all the cameras the guy is trying to get. He goes back to his house to get some money.

2 Scenes Interlinking:

1st = Cameraman A shows guy stealing a CCTV Camera.

2nd = Cameraman B shows Group getting a new Camera.

3rd = Cameraman A gets rugby tackled.

Cameraman B shouts 'Action'

The film ends